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Do you have a story in mind that makes you rub your hands together in nefarious glee, but sadly no one to play it with? Post your plots here (evilness not required) and see who might be interested! Or, if you have a check list of adventurous tasks, tracking topics are welcome as well.
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@Shesurus This is good stuff so far! I really like the description and the personality part about keeping pets (until he eats them). :D For now, I don't have much to add and I would say you can go ahead and get started playing whenever you're ready.

For context, the large island south of the mainland is called Baslehr Ridge, if you want to get specific. The islands just below it (to the southeast-ish) are also part of the Ridge. However, the dotted islands above the Ridge (to the Northwest-ish) that connect to the mainland are called the Preldova Narrows. It's not necessary for you to include those names (maybe Shesurus doesn't know what places are called), but I wanted to let you know since the Narrows aren't on the map yet.
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Just want to make sure it's okay to be one of the first Korcai. Let me know what you think, thanks
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@Horus It looks good, though you may want to revise the background slightly.

No one was ever specifically sent to kill Victoria. Bhelest left her alone after she became Korcai - even while she hunted him - because he knew she would create a bunch of bloodthirsty minions that would kill other people in Khy'eras. However, you could say that Horus was once a guard or assassin for Bhelest and while not sent to kill Victoria, he got caught in the cross-fire during one of her attempts and was turned that way. Just an idea.
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Do these changes work :?
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Horus wrote: January 8th, 2020, 4:42 am Do these changes work :?
Yep, that looks better.
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Alrightyroo, Ruth here is done and dusted and as promised, I'm letting ya know just to make sure everything is in order. A few additional notes: I've stepped away from the idea of a non-conventional half-breed as it was pushing too many envelopes and pieces just weren't fitting into place to my liking. Instead her heritage is just a plain human-elemental combo. I still kept a lot of bits and pieces, reshuffling them to hopefully make things more plausible(such as the whole experimentation thing potentially explaining why she is as powerful as she is). Still, if she's too out there for the setting feel free to smack me. <3
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@Ruthaya Sangra I think it sounds great. I can wait to see what you do with her. Have fun! <3
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Thank you very much!
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Yo wazzup. Got Cirice up but still not 100% on if she fits in the setting. Mind looking her over please? @Memoria
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@Cirice Vaisha The profile sounds great. I see no issue with it and I'm excited to see your pirate, elf lady in action.

As a side note, I did laugh a bit at this :D :
Torso / Chest: Underwhelming and not distracting.
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